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Five Sentence Fiction: A perfect strategy



‘A perfect strategy’

Shiny leather shops, pleated black trousers and crisp white shirt with hands deep in his pocket, he walks and pauses at every step of the cement slab as images concatenates at the back of his mind; a five-year-old self, he perfected the word ‘abandon’ in the mansion under construction, shrieking loudly, ‘Uncle, don’t leave me alone.’

He is impressed with the luxurious and aesthetically decorated roof and windows when the shadow facing his back struck him, his right eyes following the man who separated him from his parents, yet destiny shone bright on him in the form of the rich business tycoon who adopted him and educated him at Harvard University to script the tale of bright, famous young business man whose pictures is flashed all over the place in newspapers and magazines, cited as a model for the youth of the country.

Mr Shah, he calls, as he freezes looking the wrinkle-faced man looking in a state of total disarray and clueless, who turns his gaze, clumsily exerting his steps towards him.

He smiles,’This man is already dead, there is no need for me to take his life but I ain’t going to lose the opportunity to laugh at the departed soul, yelling in pain since it will quench my thirst for vengeance and he gotta pay for making my existence a living hell.’

The young business tycoon winked at Mr Shah, ‘Remember me’, throwing a black-and-white picture of his younger self, before three guns shots at blank point pierced his target’s heart, legs and neck, before he walks out towards his silver BMW, driving towards the studio to give a talk on to MBA studio on ‘Go for the kill and don’t be emotional fool while fine tuning market strategy.’

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This post is written as part of the creative writing prompt for Five sentence fiction this Friday, hosted by Lillie McFerrin.

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word.

This week’s word:  ABANDON



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10 thoughts on “Five Sentence Fiction: A perfect strategy

  1. I see the noir theme in ti piece. I would have preferred if the sentences were shorter. I find a very long sentence is too much of a mouthful for a reader to take in. A good read though.

  2. A dark tale, for sure. You are Clever Vishal! 5 sentences looked like a para and you could tweet in as many words with the help of a coma. Am introduced to a new way of writing.

    That simply showcases, that you are very creative.

    Thanks for the share.

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